Deeze - " Life Sucks"! need feedback on that.

[Deeze]

I just wrote it this one, but before i go recording it, i wanted to have some feedbacks from the persian community on that. This right now is what just poured out of me when i just wrote down myself. this is 100% me. its a sad, depressive, rock bottom typa song. but before i go recordign it, i wanted to know if theres anything mabye misudnerstood or sumthing. please review these lyrics.

Life Sucks

Everyday i wake up and sleep with rage in my stomach
the next day i regrett i'm still alive, but f*** it
my over aggressions make my head go nuts
the only reaction to this is like sleepin on back of cold rocks
my depression make me wanna kill happy people plus
adopt their lives and fake smiles, but that s*** never works
but the trueth is, wherever i go i feel like s***
i feel over my head theres a big cloud full of piss
it rain on my lips, i'm gone but did i exist?
is it just a strike of b***h, or just a kiss?
i got answers to questions but no one asks me
the only way to act life is to mask me
no, i don't cry for a life that i might not like
but nothings tight, i only live the life in my eye
got no time for experience or something new
F*** happiness and motherf*** a life with you

This life sucks
when u cant be what u wanna be
Life sucks
lookin for acknowledgement but u only a minority
Life sucks
you doin your best to be, but for this world you got no recepeit
It sucks, it sucks, it sucks, it sucks
Life sucks
all you thinkin about is to suicide
life sucks
no one ever ask you if you doin fine
life sucks
you could end it tonight, but got power to fight
it suks, it sucks, maan motherf*** this life

so i done school but where the f*** is the job?
wherever i go theres this sign 'no-go-spot'
S***, today after a year i see my time was robbed
so no job, no bucks now even racism took over my own block
satan embodies the elite race, same place i rot
no honour, no heart, no soul, and no grace but i got
this unrequited life wants me to kill me but i'm not
but wherever i look, i see people that needs to get shot
i dont even have the right to party, celebrate
and talkin to sumone and they say I do discriminate
every game i play i already pre-loose
nowadays even love and sex is only for the pretty people too
still at every public place they telling me " No Access"
i got the wrong colour of eye& hair plus i got the wrong sex
everything is just a rejection, how can i relax?
i think about tomorrow and i only see a dead head over the X

This life sucks
when u cant be what u wanna be
Life sucks
lookin for acknowledgement but u only a minority
Life sucks
you doin your best to be, but for this world you got no recepeit
It sucks, it sucks, it sucks, it sucks
Life sucks
all you thinkin about is to suicide
life sucks
no one ever ask you if you doin fine
life sucks
you could end it tonight, but got power to fight
it suks, it sucks, maan motherf*** this life

yes, i was already holding a gun to my head
i couldnt touch the squeeze cuz God took my hand
for the first time i felt something else besides death
and i knew God wasn't finish with me yet
this comes straight form rock bottom, its not sad or mad
its my life to me its just Rap or Death
i looking up the sky, looking for a helping hand
peoples problem is they just see themselves and never udnerstand
i look at myself and i see just a living death
a breathing dead body, a murdered soul screaming for help
The ink is my blood and the pen my best friend
i'm just a reflection of my environments sentece
i dont dream, cant find any sleep and that maintains
my heart only skip a beat for teh last savings
i'm innocent but still have less rights than a rapist
wish i was gone now, tomorrow let my soul reborn in 3 Babys

This life sucks
when u cant be what u wanna be
Life sucks
lookin for acknowledgement but u only a minority
Life sucks
you doin your best to be, but for this world you got no recepeit
It sucks, it sucks, it sucks, it sucks
Life sucks
all you thinkin about is to suicide
life sucks
no one ever ask you if you doin fine
life sucks
you could end it tonight, but got power to fight
it suks, it sucks, maan motherf*** this life

[Cop]

wohoo great ;)

[Najibam]

wohoo great ;)

Cool picture..nice to see some iranian soccer-players (did I spell that right I'm from Sweden)?

[Najibam]

Khejli kosham omad Deeze maksosan harvaght neveshti: my depression make me wanna kill happy people plus
adopt their lives and fake smiles, but that s*** never works
Manam bazivaghta in ehsas ra mikonam

[Deeze]

Khejli kosham omad Deeze maksosan harvaght neveshti: my depression make me wanna kill happy people plus
adopt their lives and fake smiles, but that s*** never works
Manam bazivaghta in ehsas ra mikonam


thank you, i really appreciate. but yeah thast me.
the main reason you may feel me on this, is you are from sweden/europe. myself is stuck a gaymany oops i mean germany/europe. and life really sucks. here in europe we are biggest minority. thats why maybe alotta brothers & sisters in U.S. cant feel us cuz in the u.s. them blacks and hispanic people are the big minority. there i got lots of love from them. so actually i am just doin this to get away from europe and to come over to the u.s. cuz here i dont get a chance at all in no way. no company wants to hire a " black head" etc. you know that. so as i say to me its rap or death, if this rap thing dont work out for me and i dont get a job / greencard over there then everything is over.
hey check this i just wrote that extended 16 bars verse.

Sometimes i put on Pac's ' Changes' and i look in the mirror
and i face a broke man who tells me i'm his hero
he reaches out his hands to me but i break the mirror
we know we see each other again when my heads down the pillow
so i gotta admitt my life's like a vicious circle
every corner is a trick i'm just wounded urban
i didnt choose to be i'm what society made me
from a good boy to menace, if it dont kill me it strenghten me
i got the blackhead laible for life on my head
spendign the past decade of time praying for my death
i've eaten so much s***, step back i'm about to puke
i hope oen day i see one of my peeps coming up in a suit
when i go out and see sumone i look at devils eyes
Dear God, i'm 22 never lived although this is 2005
i'm walking your lightened way and now this is a dead end
i close my eyes and see that Man in mirror was my best friend

[Najibam]

It's true the european society is very isolated and guarded it's hard for us iranians who are more open (not everyone though) and searchful....